Monday, December 19, 2011

5 Steps to Making the Best Horse Ad EVER!

It is easy and fun to critique bad horse ads. You know the ones I’m talking about (actually, you can SEE the ones I’m talking about – just scroll down to the next post). We’ve all had quite the chuckle over bad pictures, bad spelling (confirmation, broadmare, sorrul) and even worse, bad wording. But you know what? Writing a good horse ad, an ad that gets you responses from the right kind of people and generates genuine interest in the horse you are trying to sell, is hard. Like, really really hard. So I’ve contrived five steps in an attempt to make it a little easier.

STEP ONE: Take good pictures. This is SO important. Not only will a photo ad place you above text ads in the listings, but a nice picture in an otherwise crappily written ad will make someone sit up and take notice. You can call your Arabian mare beautiful all you want, but until I see a picture to prove it I’m not buying it (har har har, pun intended). A good picture accentuates your horse’s best traits. If you are selling your horse as a jumper, include a nice jumping picture. If you claim your horse is a dressage expert, show them doing dressage. If you don’t have a good picture of your horse doing the things you claim they can do, DO NOT SUBSTITUTE WITH A BAD PICTURE. Sure, maybe your horse does jump with its knees square and tucked under its chin nine times out of ten, but you’re not helping your cause any by showing the one picture where they look like a flying deer.

Nothing beats a nice solid conformation picture. Get your horse cleaned up (I loathe the ads that say “this picture was taking during mud season, sorry!” – if you didn’t care enough to groom your horse before taking sale pics, chances are you didn’t care enough to put good training into them either) and position them on level ground in front of a pretty backdrop (the side of your barn, in front of your outdoor arena, in the middle of a field, I don’t care… just as long as it isn’t in front of your junkyard). Take a few pictures, and then select the best one. Make sure your horse’s ears are up! It sounds like a little thing, but no one wants a grumpy looking horse. You can also spruce the picture up a little by putting your horse in the bridle of their discipline, whether it is hunters, dressage, or western pleasure. Skip the saddle. Here are a few examples of what I consider to be GOOD sale photos:



And a few examples of stupid ones:



People, I don’t care if you can stand on your horse’s back. I will never be standing on their back, so that is not a selling trait for me. It does not tell me your horse is uber bombproof, it just tells me you are uber dumb. Some other basic photo tips:

- Take up to date pictures.
- Throw out any picture that has children crawling on, around, between, or over your horse. Again, it doesn’t show that your horse is special – it just shows that you’re a bad parent.
- Have additional pictures ready to send to interested buyers.


STEP TWO: Remember to include all the important information up front. This includes your horse’s breed, age, gender, height, and trained discipline (IE does dressage, jumpers, reining, or good all around prospect). And be concise! People don’t want to have to wade through a bunch of nonsense to get the basic information. A good example:

“15.3H five year old registered Quarter Horse gelding for sale. Is currently schooling first level dressage, has jumped a 2’6” course and is excellent on trails.”

Bam. It checks off all the basics: height, age, breed, gender (gelding – yay!), and what he does: dressage, jumping, and is good on trails. Now lets look at a bad example:

“Big beautiful horse for sale! Gunner is the easiest horse in the barn to ride. He whinnies every morning when you come to feed him and is a total love bug. He gets along great with other horses and he loves to get out of the ring and go on the trails!! He is really good at dressage, and right now I’m training him at first level. He can also jump and is really good at that too. Gunner is a purebred quarter horse with awesome bloodlines and good conformation. He is really sweet for a five year old and is almost 16H.”

Does it include the basics? Yes. Does it do it in a concise manner that is easy to read? No. So ferret out all the facts about your horse, and put them in the first few sentences. In my opinion, the shorter the better for an ad, but you also have to be careful not to leave information out.

“Five year old QH for sale. Good jumper. Asking $2,500.”

Doesn’t tell me what I need to know.

STEP THREE: List your horse’s accomplishments and/or what they are good at. Have they won any major shows? Have they won local schooling shows? Have they been used in a lesson program? You don’t need to go into great detail, but if you’re horse has won a few blue ribbons don’t be shy. You need to think about your sale ad almost like you would your own resume. Brag about your horse without going overboard.

“Last month Maggie beat out fifteen other horses to win reserve champion at a local hunter show.”

“Jiffy placed second in his very first dressage show doing training level one.”

“Two weeks ago Gunner went on his first hunter pace and was wonderful to ride. He did not refuse one single jump, listened beautifully, and didn’t mind all the other horses. I received many compliments on him from total strangers.”

Again, be concise. Stick to the facts, and don’t stray off course. If you’re trying to sell your horse as a reining champion, talking about how he placed in a jumping class isn’t going to help your cause.

STEP FOUR: If your horse has any bad habits or lameness issues, list them. It will come up eventually (if you’re honest) and it is better to let a potential buyer know your horse had a bowed tendon now than waiting until they’ve driven three hours to your farm. Again, it is all in the wording.

“Maggie bowed her left front tendon two years ago. Since recovering she has been 100% sound and has up to date x-rays.”

“Gunner cribs, but it is controlled with a cribbing collar.”

“Jiffy will do best in an environment where he is turned out by himself.”

“Jax has tender soles, but with front shoes and pads he is 100% sound.”



is so much better than…


“Two years ago Maggie suffered a bowed tendon to her left front leg. After one month of stall rest and two months of cold hosing and hand walking only, she has made a full recovery and is now completely sound.”

“Gunner is a bad cribber, but if he wears his cribbing collar he is fine.”

“Jiffy does not get along well with other horses and he must be turned out by himself at all times.”

“When we first bought Jax he was lame, but after talking with our farrier we discovered he just had very sensitive soles. If he wears shoes and pads he is perfectly sound.”


STEP FIVE: End your ad with a flourish. Include the price, and one more sentence of additional information IF YOU FEEL IT IS ABSOLUTELY NECESSARY.

“Maggie is priced firmly at $5,000. She is truly a wonderful mare with a very successful future ahead of her. Serious inquiries only please.”

“We are asking $2,500 for Gunner or best offer to a good home only. References from a vet and farrier will be required.”


Seriously consider your price, and how you want to word it. If ‘or best offer’ appears anywhere in your ad, you will never get what you are asking. If you don’t want to haggle with people and truly believe your horse is worth what you’re asking, then say the price is firm. Serious inquiries only is always a good touch, as it will deter tire kickers. And I like to see ads that say ‘to a good home only’ because that tells me you really care about your horse.

Now all that’s left is to put your ad together! And here we go:

“Seventeen hand eight year old registered thoroughbred gelding for sale. Currently schooling first level dressage, has shown and won in intro level and training level at the local horse park. Sound and sensible. No vices or bad habits. Very sweet, quiet mannered horse. Only selling due to time constraints. Asking $1,000,000 or best offer. Vet and farrier references will be required, in addition to a home visit.”


I hope this little tutorial was helpful. I challenge all of you reading to write up a little sale ad for your horse and stick in the comments. I bet it will be a lot harder than you think!

8 comments:

  1. I sold a welsh pony a little while ago:

    We have for sale “Sunny”, she is a welsh pony by the sire Lykanarro Toff and the dam Lykanarro Vienna, and is able to be registered in Section B. She will be 3 years old on the 2nd of October, and is 13.2hh. She is exceptionally well behaved for a 3 year old and has been broken in recently. She is good to catch, shoe, float and rug, although worming is her downfall (she much prefers pellet wormers). She is very easy to tack up and groom and you could never find a horse more accepting of the bit. She stops and turns on a dime, and is very responsive. She has been ridden both bareback and under saddle, while she was being trained; she didn’t put a foot wrong and exceeded every expectation I had. Sunny has very smooth flowing gaits which makes her very comfortable to ride. She has good conformation and a good mind; she is very willing and tries her hardest to please. She has been ridden by riders of different experience levels, and preformed well for each. She is an extremely easy keeper and has been fed only grass since we have owned her. VERY soft snaffle mouth, and is a very hardy pony. She would suit an intermediate rider as she is still unsure of some things and needs someone who will guide & be firm with her. I think she could benefit from further education as she will make a great show pony, and is truly beautiful. Great temperament. She will only go to the best of homes, and ideally the new owners will possess knowledge of health care and maintenance as well as riding. I would like to place her in a long term home where she will be very loved. She is a very honest pony, and enjoys nothing more than a good scratch behind her ears =)
    $2,500 negotiable.

    I posted these pictures:
    http://images.ozfreeonline.com/static/classifieds/0,0,4/1283937835_offer_SDC10702.JPG

    http://images.ozfreeonline.com/static/classifieds/0,0,4/1283937835_offer_Sunny1.JPG

    She was sold to a young teenager. I did a home visit and kept in touch for a few months, they sent me a video and we spoke on the phone a few times.

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    1. Hi I know thus is a very old add but I'm trying to find pics of lykanarro vienna. If you have any could you contact me on 0430523234

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    2. Hi I know thus is a very old add but I'm trying to find pics of lykanarro vienna. If you have any could you contact me on 0430523234

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  2. Perfect example:
    free gray white mustang draft cross horse (elgin)

    he is not getting along with our other geldings. probably needs to be an only gelding with some mares. he isnt dangerous, we are just sick of the bickering. we got him from nevada and he is a papered mustang. comes with his papers. he is big so we think he is a draft cross. big head and feet, about 15+ hands. he is white, maybe flea bitten gray. he is really dirty/muddy in the pictures. the mustang rescue people said he was about ten years old but he has some moon blindness so we think he is a little older than that. they said he was ridden everyday, but we have never gotten on him. totally sound, not a mark on him as he is the big shot around here. free, you come and get him. $100 if i have to trailer for you (25 miles max). call Tim at 512.507.7169 to set up an appointment. good home only, he is not a rodeo bucking horse or a slaughter horse!

    http://images.craigslist.org/5I75Gf5Hb3F63I93L4bck16cba13c4fb013d1.jpg
    http://images.craigslist.org/5Fb5Hc5J83I33F13Hcbcka7f6a92cb5901693.jpg

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  3. Thank you, Tim, for clearing up that he is 'not a rodeo horse or a slaughter horse'. I was confused at first as to what you thought he might be good for - seeing as you don't know his age, history, rideability, and the fact that you are giving him away for free - but since you put that little disclaimer in there (I mean, we ALL know people who pick up horses to ship to slaughter wear big signs on their chests telling what they do) I think he would make a fabulous childrens horse. Or maybe an eventer. No? Ah, well. Perhaps you should have sat down and thought a little bit more before getting a big ol' mustang with moon blindness.

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  4. Personally, I LOVE the second picture. Look at that flexibility!

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